i need help with writing a second draft of a letter

Revise your letter. Make sure that your letter is addressed to an individual that has the power to make the changes you want to see or to influence a decision-maker. Your letter should have a clear and achievable “ask.” In your letter, tell your audience why you feel the way you do. Explain what experiences, knowledge, or value systems influenced your point of view on the issue. Identify an area of common ground with your audience and use it as a way to focus your argument and convince your audience. Provide evidence to back up your claims. If you use any data, statistics, quotes, or ideas from a source, make sure you cite that source in a footnote.